Song i was writing

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  1. Doubl3Ac3

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    well apparently i'm pretty good with words and last night I ended up going to a wierd trance wheni wrote this. the Rhyme scheme is pretty basic but the lyrics are pretty solid

    Gripping your hands tight
    Tomorrow begins another fight
    Darkness fills your heart and soul
    Your mind is lost there’s no control

    Gaze into your soul with looks of dread
    And hope to god you wake up dead
    All is lost pray for salvation
    To save you from your own damnation

    Endless rage is your desire
    So step inside the burning pyre
    All your hope has gone to silence
    Enter the world with hells alliance

    Another time another place
    Gone insane from your troubled face
    The end is near so drop to your knees
    And pray to god to help you please

    Rage is eternal and so is life
    To end it all with the blade of a knife
    Driven to the edge of reason
    To be the result of god’s own treason

    Endless rage is your desire
    So step inside the burning pyre
    All your hope has gone to silence
    Enter the world with hells alliance

    When you break it will be grave
    Your time is up for we can’t save
    Say a prayer for your troubled soul
    For you have paid the ultimate toll
     
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    I take it you are a fan of metal music!

    Good stuff! I actually like it. I seems like some the stuff I used to write when I was in a Thrash band in High School.

    I can not wait to get to Alaska so I can form a new band!
     
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    Yeah its good, albeit a bit cheesy but then if its for a power metal band it will go very nicely.

    The verse/stanzas keep the same length which is important however you can mix up with 'hook' words, ie which ones rhyme 1st and 4th or even have them in seperate verses.

    Ultimately comes down to the music it has to fit around.

    Keep it up! 8)
     
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