Song i was writing

well apparently i'm pretty good with words and last night I ended up going to a wierd trance wheni wrote this. the Rhyme scheme is pretty basic but the lyrics are pretty solid

Gripping your hands tight
Tomorrow begins another fight
Darkness fills your heart and soul
Your mind is lost there's no control

Gaze into your soul with looks of dread
And hope to god you wake up dead
All is lost pray for salvation
To save you from your own damnation

Endless rage is your desire
So step inside the burning pyre
All your hope has gone to silence
Enter the world with hells alliance

Another time another place
Gone insane from your troubled face
The end is near so drop to your knees
And pray to god to help you please

Rage is eternal and so is life
To end it all with the blade of a knife
Driven to the edge of reason
To be the result of god's own treason

Endless rage is your desire
So step inside the burning pyre
All your hope has gone to silence
Enter the world with hells alliance

When you break it will be grave
Your time is up for we can't save
Say a prayer for your troubled soul
For you have paid the ultimate toll

I take it you are a fan of metal music!

Good stuff! I actually like it. I seems like some the stuff I used to write when I was in a Thrash band in High School.

I can not wait to get to Alaska so I can form a new band!

Yeah its good, albeit a bit cheesy but then if its for a power metal band it will go very nicely.

The verse/stanzas keep the same length which is important however you can mix up with 'hook' words, ie which ones rhyme 1st and 4th or even have them in seperate verses.

Ultimately comes down to the music it has to fit around.

Keep it up! 8)